[AA2] A Matter of Justice

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dymondy2k
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Re: A Matter of Justice

Post Fri Aug 02, 2013 2:02 pm

- Introduction, delete extra space in "... Barony, my home brewed" - DONE
- What's Really Going On, 2nd paragraph, delete extra "a" - DONE
- What's Really Going On, 3rd paragraph, delete extra spaces in "... and made his first", "of them to an old" - I couldn't find this, I did find an extra space at the beginning of the next sentence though. Some of this might be the justification it tries to do.
- #6 Dining Room, last sentence is a fragment - Changed it to this 'He may also make a few disparaging remarks about their mothers while he issues orders to the other men in the room.'
- #9 Meeting Room, boxed text, correct to "well-dressed" -DONE
- #12 The Barracks, first boxed text, correct to "What have their attention are two..." -DONE

Changes made and new version uploaded! Thanx for the passthrough.
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Re: A Matter of Justice

Post Mon Jan 05, 2015 11:48 am

I've changed up the intro a bit, just to make it more generic and not so specific in storyline. I figure this makes it very easy to drop into any existing campaign.

I want to get this one into AA 2 so if I could get another passthrough that would be great. What I really would like is somebody who is better at tenses than I am.. I notice I tend to wander from past to present...
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Re: A Matter of Justice

Post Mon Jan 05, 2015 12:47 pm

It's already in AA2. Any updates you make you need to email to Solo so they can be updated there. I will go over once AA2 is updated.
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Re: A Matter of Justice

Post Mon Jan 05, 2015 4:00 pm

I'll fire up the ODT over to him then...

I'm also working on another short adventure.. Are we still accepting submissions for AA2?
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Re: A Matter of Justice

Post Mon Jan 05, 2015 7:54 pm

Yes, indeed. AA2 needs to mass up to 80 pages or so.
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Re: A Matter of Justice

Post Wed Jan 07, 2015 10:30 am

I've incorporated this adventure into AA2. If you wish to make further changes, please do the following:

First, post in that thread that you will be making changes. That will warn Chi and I that we should hold off working on it while you are doing your thing.

Second, download a current AA2 and make your changes. Upload the changed version to a new post in that thread when you're done.

When you upload the revised version, I'll download it, do the usual layout pass and build a new PDF. So no, you don't need to do the PDF yourself. When the layout pass is done I'll upload final versions to the first post in the AA2 thread.
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