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- Introduction, delete extra space in "... Barony, my home brewed" - DONE
- What's Really Going On, 2nd paragraph, delete extra "a" - DONE
- What's Really Going On, 3rd paragraph, delete extra spaces in "... and made his first", "of them to an old" - I couldn't find this, I did find an extra space at the beginning of the next sentence though. Some of this might be the justification it tries to do.
- #6 Dining Room, last sentence is a fragment - Changed it to this 'He may also make a few disparaging remarks about their mothers while he issues orders to the other men in the room.'
- #9 Meeting Room, boxed text, correct to "well-dressed" -DONE
- #12 The Barracks, first boxed text, correct to "What have their attention are two..." -DONE

Changes made and new version uploaded! Thanx for the passthrough.

I've changed up the intro a bit, just to make it more generic and not so specific in storyline. I figure this makes it very easy to drop into any existing campaign.

I want to get this one into AA 2 so if I could get another passthrough that would be great. What I really would like is somebody who is better at tenses than I am.. I notice I tend to wander from past to present...

It's already in AA2. Any updates you make you need to email to Solo so they can be updated there. I will go over once AA2 is updated.

I'll fire up the ODT over to him then...

I'm also working on another short adventure.. Are we still accepting submissions for AA2?

Yes, indeed. AA2 needs to mass up to 80 pages or so.

I've incorporated this adventure into AA2. If you wish to make further changes, please do the following:

First, post in that thread that you will be making changes. That will warn Chi and I that we should hold off working on it while you are doing your thing.

Second, download a current AA2 and make your changes. Upload the changed version to a new post in that thread when you're done.

When you upload the revised version, I'll download it, do the usual layout pass and build a new PDF. So no, you don't need to do the PDF yourself. When the layout pass is done I'll upload final versions to the first post in the AA2 thread.