SG1 Saga of the Giants - Hill Giant Hall

[Solomoriah]

Okay, I've uploaded the revised copy Ynas sent me. Please, anyone wishing to make further changes for submission needs to do two things:

1) Say it here, in this thread, so everyone else will leave it alone while you're working on it, and

2) Download the copy I just uploaded, even if you think you have an up-to-date copy, as I made some formatting corrections I don't want to have to repeat again (this is already the second time, but that's my fault).

Thanks, Ynas, for all the good work, and thanks JD for submitting this in the first place!

[jdn2006]

Love the additions and ideas. Ynas can do more if there's time. If not, I'm collecting fixes and such for another version... (I can do a document compare if someone else does an edit first...)

[Ynas Midgard]

I intend to add some flavour to the remaining random encounter tables but I'm currently occupied preparing for my new campaign with Torchbearer.

[chiisu81]

- Title Page: lower-case "the" ie "Saga of the Giants"?
- Player Characters and Tactics: change to "well-equipped"
- Possible Encounters Outside the Lair, 54-56, change to "homemade"
- Surface Level, 13. Guest Living Room, "cascet" of perfume? Perhaps simply call small bottle or such?
- Surface Level, 13. Guest Living Room, correct spelling of "bejweled"
- Surface Level, 17. Secret Passage Down, change to "pry-bar" or "pry bar"?
- Surface Level, 28. Smithy, correct spelling to "re-forged"
- Main Dungeon Level, 9. Empty Storage, correct spelling to "non-combatants"
- Main Dungeon Level, 11. Secret Temple, correct to "lose its power"
- Main Dungeon Level, 16. Jail and Torture, "mannequins"?
- Secret Dungeon Level, 7. Snake-Women, delete extra "they" in first sentence
- Last page (before OGL license), first line of Notes, delete extra "." after "etc."

[Solomoriah]

- Title Page: lower-case "the" ie "Saga of the Giants"?

Done.

- Player Characters and Tactics: change to "well-equipped"

Ur. Don't know the rule on this one. It looks better to me without the dash, but if there's some rule requiring one, I suppose I'll bow to the convention.

- Possible Encounters Outside the Lair, 54-56, change to "homemade"

Went with "handmade" instead.

- Surface Level, 13. Guest Living Room, "cascet" of perfume? Perhaps simply call small bottle or such?

As far as I can find out, the word refers to a small box like a jewelry box. Doesn't seem a likely place to store perfume. Unless JD weighs in here, I think I'll go with "bottle."

- Surface Level, 13. Guest Living Room, correct spelling of "bejweled"

Your spelling here is wrong. Furthermore, as far as I can tell, JD's is fine. What am I missing?

- Surface Level, 17. Secret Passage Down, change to "pry-bar" or "pry bar"?

Yeah, the latter. Changed.

- Surface Level, 28. Smithy, correct spelling to "re-forged"

Reforged (without the dash) is apparently correct.

- Main Dungeon Level, 9. Empty Storage, correct spelling to "non-combatants"

Also apparently right as is (no dash).

Are you proofing with non-American rules? As far as I know, JD is American (at least, his manuscripts read that way) and so my policy is to apply American proofing rules. In all cases, I intend to publish materials using the original author's choice of nationality (it's not a pro-US bias per se).

- Main Dungeon Level, 11. Secret Temple, correct to "lose its power"

Ack. Fixed.

- Main Dungeon Level, 16. Jail and Torture, "mannequins"?

Fixed.

- Secret Dungeon Level, 7. Snake-Women, delete extra "they" in first sentence

Done.

- Last page (before OGL license), first line of Notes, delete extra "." after "etc."

Fixed.

[Solomoriah]

I've uploaded a new version of SG1. It contains edits by both JD and chiisu81, and a few formatting updates by myself, so anyone wanting to make further changes should download the new version before starting.

[jdn2006]

I've uploaded a new version of SG1. It contains edits by both JD and chiisu81, and a few formatting updates by myself, so anyone wanting to make further changes should download the new version before starting.

Thanks. Spelling is tricky - and when I get it wrong it needs to be corrected. When it veers into the gray [grey] area of dfferent conventions it can be a waste of time going back and forth. [It is often better] to simplify anything that might be confusing, like you did here and there.

[SmootRK]

I've uploaded a new version of SG1. It contains edits by both JD and chiisu81, and a few formatting updates by myself, so anyone wanting to make further changes should download the new version before starting.

Thanks. Spelling is tricky - and when I get it wrong it needs to be corrected. When it veers into the gray [grey] area of dfferent conventions it can be a waste of time going back and forth. And to simplify anything that might be confusing, like you did here and there.

It is always nice to have a good editor working alongside.

I cannot wait until we get this stuff put together as a super-module sort of thing.

[Ynas Midgard]

Bryce Lynch posted a review of this product on his site.

[jdn2006]

Bryce Lynch posted a review of this product on his site.

That was a handy review, especially the constructive criticism.

I'm downloading the files to look them over as a result and make a few changes.