Okay, I can't wait for the next version; I just post some ideas about a few rooms found on the Main Dungeon Level.
Area 3
I don't really get why flesh golems would be prisoners, especially since they are capable of bending the bars and thus escape.
However, the flesh golems could be retained by placing them on the other side of the door, making them wardens, guarding important prisoners (random table is forthcoming). Plus, it could be a great area to introduce a new character to the party if somebody lost one.
Area 7
It is quite disturbing - and that is good
Two points, though.
First, why do they attack on sight? It would be much more interesting if they could be reasoned with; i.e. use the regular reaction table (BFRPG has such a one, right?).
Second, the axe is nice but the mundane treasure lacks flavour. How about the following:
(1) a necklace made of teeth of beasts and monsters (worth 200 g.p.)
(2) an ornamented torc (worth 300 g.p.)
(3) and a bottle of excellent whiskey (100 g.p.)
Area 10
It would be awesome if the spider statue was given a value in g.p.
I would change the last sentence to the following:
"Each mummy has an
amulet of protection from undead (it turns as a 6 hit die undead) with a small ruby in the center (worth 400 g.p. each) and has jades in their eye sockets (worth 200 g.p. each)."
Area 11 is a nice empty room. Maybe one could add how many turns it would take to clean up the rubble to access the door to
12.
Area 12
There is a typo: "it has a magical explosive run
e".
When the hill giant chief is referred to, it might be worth mentioning in which room he can be found.
The treasure chests' contents could be changed to the following:
- (1) three gold bars weighing 25 pounds apiece (worth 1,250 g.p. each) and an archaic urn, into whose surface the world's creation is carved (worth 600 g.p.), folded in a superior cloak of snow leopard fur (worth 300 g.p.)
(2) 10 pounds of high quality salt (150 g.p.) in an engraved jar (worth 50 g.p.) which sits on a chainmail made of painted dinosaur scales (worth 600 g.p.)
(3) 8 arrows and 9 crossbow bolts (all silver-tipped), an ornamental mace with platinum head (worth 200 g.p), a sword with cold-iron blade (50 g.p.), and a longbow made of the woody flesh of a treant (worth 500 g.p.)
(4) a heavy tome bound in the leather of elven virgins describing several necromantic rituals (worth 1,750 g.p.) and five silver earrings (10 g.p. apiece)
(5) an engraved jewelbox (worth 100 g.p.) containing a tiara inlaid with small sapphires (2,500 g.p.) and a palm-sized black opal (worth 1,200 g.p.), in fact the prison of the demon Groxgratvak
The three bags could hold 2,500 silver pieces each instead, making this a pretty valuable trove of treasures (approximately 12,550 g.p. of value, which is actually pretty close to the original 11k + copper).
Area 13
First, typo: "The north wall has been broken into in two places".
Second, the steps beyond the secret door to the south "ascend to the north 30 feet at a steep incline" - it should be rephrased as a descending staircase, to make it simpler.
Third, the description of the trap starts as "Whoever is residing in the tunnels to the north has created a trap" - that should be rephrased to actually mention the ones who created the trap. Otherwise, passive voice, perhaps? I mean, the text is written for GMs and they should know what's going on.
Fourth, the map key does not have an entry for X (or P, north of 18, for that matter).
