[AA4] The Crypt of Baylor

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Re: [AA4] The Crypt of Baylor

Post Wed Apr 14, 2021 10:02 am

Okay, but what is the actual WORD? It's an abbreviation, and surely the word isn't "Ma" given that a large number of human languages use some version of that sound for "Mother."
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Re: [AA4] The Crypt of Baylor

Post Wed Apr 14, 2021 11:44 am

Updates: reworded and checked the style guide.
Added players map (for those who use vtts if that's a thing that might be useful to add to pdfs)
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Re: [AA4] The Crypt of Baylor

Post Thu Apr 15, 2021 7:24 am

Looks great, thanks!
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Re: [AA4] The Crypt of Baylor

Post Sun Apr 18, 2021 7:52 am

Revision 7, Changed some fonts on the maps, added a regional map of sorts. I have a couple of other little adventures in mind based around that small area.
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Re: [AA4] The Crypt of Baylor

Post Wed Apr 21, 2021 6:34 am

Starting all over.

Page 3.

"The bandits quickly cleared out the cave and found that it led into an old crypt of a forgotten local lord,".

Should be "the" old crypt unless there is more than one.

"Despite being under strict instructions not to open any sarcophagi"

Should be singular thus "sarcophagus".

Page 4.

"while the moral remains of his wife decayed into dust."

Should be mortal, I think.
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Re: [AA4] The Crypt of Baylor

Post Wed Apr 21, 2021 6:13 pm

Seven wrote: Wed Apr 21, 2021 6:34 am "Despite being under strict instructions not to open any sarcophagi"

Should be singular thus "sarcophagus".
Why should it be singular?
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Re: [AA4] The Crypt of Baylor

Post Thu Apr 22, 2021 7:43 am

I wasn't sure, so I checked some grammar site.

Seems like the meaning is "do not open any one thing".
If the meaning was "do not open any 2 or more things", it would be OK to open one sarcophagus.

Of course, I could be wrong.
I'm no English teacher.
So very far from that.
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Re: [AA4] The Crypt of Baylor

Post Thu Apr 22, 2021 7:52 am

Still page 4 "and his gang of outlaws.."

Probably just the one coma.

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Re: [AA4] The Crypt of Baylor

Post Thu Apr 22, 2021 11:21 pm

Seven wrote: Thu Apr 22, 2021 7:43 am I wasn't sure, so I checked some grammar site.

Seems like the meaning is "do not open any one thing".
If the meaning was "do not open any 2 or more things", it would be OK to open one sarcophagus.

Of course, I could be wrong.
I'm no English teacher.
So very far from that.
"Sarcophagi" seems correct to me. Maybe rephrase it? "Leave all sarcophagi unopened" or something similar.
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Re: [AA4] The Crypt of Baylor

Post Fri Apr 23, 2021 7:41 am

"...not to open any of the sarcophagi" reads better to me than "...not to open any sarcophagi"
I also like Minkey's possible edit/re-write
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