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Re: New Adventure for Review: "The Blackapple Brugh"
Posted: Tue Aug 18, 2020 2:46 pm
by peelseel2
Ibix in the Field Guide Volume 1 p 31 is Ibix, in the description of faun, but Ibex on pg 64 & pg 79.
In the text throughout the module it is Ibix, Ibex, Ibexes.
Re: New Adventure for Review: "The Blackapple Brugh"
Posted: Tue Aug 18, 2020 3:02 pm
by peelseel2
p 10, rumor 11, “Mark my works, all these...
Is that supposed to be words? It could work the way it is.
Re: New Adventure for Review: "The Blackapple Brugh"
Posted: Fri Aug 21, 2020 7:34 am
by Bumblepig
peelseel2 wrote: ↑Tue Aug 18, 2020 2:46 pm
Ibix in the Field Guide Volume 1 p 31 is Ibix, in the description of faun, but Ibex on pg 64 & pg 79.
In the text throughout the module it is Ibix, Ibex, Ibexes.
No wonder I got muddled if it wasn't consistent in the Field Guide. I'm just going to call them "Ibix" (plural Ibixes) since Ibix is in the main entry in the FG. Also, apparently there's a real type of goat called an Ibex, so I don't think they should be the same.
I addressed your other edits (good catches) and updated the OGL page to reflect updates made to Field Guide 3 monsters.
New version is R8.
Re: The Blackapple Brugh
Posted: Fri Aug 21, 2020 7:50 am
by chiisu81
Good catches on the OGL page

I've edited FG1 r40 for the "Ibix" consistency issue.
Re: The Blackapple Brugh
Posted: Thu Aug 27, 2020 3:02 pm
by Colin the Bard
Here is the Elf Lord bad guy:

- Elf Lord by Colin Richards.jpg (1.13 MiB) Viewed 1043 times
Re: The Blackapple Brugh
Posted: Thu Aug 27, 2020 3:25 pm
by Solomoriah
Man, I love when artists use filenames I don't have to change...

Every file I get, gets the artist's name added at the end just like that. Thanks!
(Also, very nice picture.)
Re: The Blackapple Brugh
Posted: Thu Aug 27, 2020 5:10 pm
by Bumblepig
Colin the Bard wrote: ↑Thu Aug 27, 2020 3:02 pm
Here is the Elf Lord bad guy:Elf Lord by Colin Richards.jpg
I love it! Thanks so much, he looks exactly as he should... this elf is arrogant and weird, not some Legolas clone.

Re: The Blackapple Brugh
Posted: Thu Aug 27, 2020 6:45 pm
by Zoltors Inkwell
Colin the Bard wrote: ↑Thu Aug 27, 2020 3:02 pm
Here is the Elf Lord bad guy:Elf Lord by Colin Richards.jpg
You really captured this guy. Looks great.
Re: The Blackapple Brugh
Posted: Fri Aug 28, 2020 11:57 am
by Bumblepig
I've just uploaded r9. This includes:
- Colin's portrait of the Elf Lord (thanks again Colin!)
- Changes from my final complete read-through. These are mostly minor, having to do with points of clarification, removing some extra text, and correcting minor inconsistencies. I'd have to say that between Chi, Seven, and peelseel2's editing it seems pretty dang clean. It's at the point where I personally want to avoid making further tweaks because I risk creating new errors more than any possible gain.
- I avoid doing anything that affects layout much because I know that can create problems for others later on. However I did extend the Fungal Garden graphic on page 27 to span the whole page since I thought too much detail was hard to see when it only spanned 1 column. If that creates problems or doesn't look good feel free to shrink it back.
Re: The Blackapple Brugh
Posted: Fri Aug 28, 2020 12:05 pm
by Bumblepig
Solo,
As the author I think it's "complete" enough to get bumped up into the Showcase. But for that to happen I think it needs your once-over (if I'm reading the submission guidelines right).
I'd like to get it in a place where it's more visible so people can actually use it, because I'd still like to get playtesting type feedback. I go back to basic questions that can only be answered by people other than me running it: Is is really suitable for levels 1-3, and does it really flow well, not feel too railroady, and (most importantly) provide FUN?
Anyway, please let me know if it's on track or if you need anything else from my end.