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I thought Sudsy drew the bee pics?

Not that one, the one with the skeletal corpse that's in the R84 Core Rules.

Uploading R24 right now, and it needs some artwork.

Anyone with some time on his or her hands want to go through the submissions in the Artwork forum and see if anything there would fit? (Anything appropriate to the module, of course.)

If we can't find existing art to use, we'll need to see if anyone is willing to do some new art.

R25 is up.

And it needs eyes. I fixed inconsistent NPC statblocks in the garrison, but there were so many... I'm not sure I got them all right. And I'm sure the rest of the module could use a look-over. J.D. has already used his automated proofing tools on it, so hopefully all the checkboxes are good.

Page 9-12: is there supposed to be more than one space after each bolded room label? (ie each one has multiple spaces before the unbolded text)
Page 10, 7. Residence: change "a herbalist" to "an herbalist" (note removal of extra space)
Page 11, 10. Residence: Remove extra space before 2nd sentence (This house is owned...)
Page 13, Rumor Table, #4: remove extra space before period
Page 19, 4c, boxed text: remove extra space (...of straw and several...)
Page 19, 5: remove extra space (nearer walls)
Page 22, 21. Large Halls: remove extra space (...glyphs are carved...)
Page 28, last paragraph before Note About Monster Levels: remove extra space (...above. The GM may...)
Page 38, 4th paragraph: remove extra space (If the character falling...)
Page 39, 34. Secret Room: remove extra space (...will be restored to normal...)
Page 40, 39. Former Ghoul Storage, last paragraph: remove extra space (...who enter for 2d6...)
Page 44, 62. Giant Fly Lair: remove extra space (...hallway west 20'...)

chiisu81 wrote:Page 9-12: is there supposed to be more than one space after each bolded room label? (ie each one has multiple spaces before the unbolded text)

Two spaces is the intent. They all look correct to me.

chiisu81 wrote:Page 10, 7. Residence: change "a herbalist" to "an herbalist" (note removal of extra space)

Ooh, tricky. I've been told by persons of the English persuasion that the "h" in "herbalist" is supposed to be voiced, and it's just an accent thing. But I do believe in American usage, "an" is probably correct.

chiisu81 wrote:Page 11, 10. Residence: Remove extra space before 2nd sentence (This house is owned...)

Though the document probably isn't consistent, two spaces after final punctuation is my style. But given the wide gap I'm getting with respect to that sentence, I'm pulling one of them out.

Incidentally, building 10 had four spaces after the colon, twice my intent, and I've fixed that.

chiisu81 wrote:Page 13, Rumor Table, #4: remove extra space before period

Fixed. Actually added a few words.

chiisu81 wrote:Page 19, 4c, boxed text: remove extra space (...of straw and several...)

Dang, how do you see those so easily?

chiisu81 wrote:Page 19, 5: remove extra space (nearer walls)

That one was a bit easier to see.

chiisu81 wrote:Page 22, 21. Large Halls: remove extra space (...glyphs are carved...)

Got it.

chiisu81 wrote:Page 28, last paragraph before Note About Monster Levels: remove extra space (...above. The GM may...)

Leaving this one.

chiisu81 wrote:Page 38, 4th paragraph: remove extra space (If the character falling...)

Fixed.

chiisu81 wrote:Page 39, 34. Secret Room: remove extra space (...will be restored to normal...)

Fixed.

chiisu81 wrote:Page 40, 39. Former Ghoul Storage, last paragraph: remove extra space (...who enter for 2d6...)

Fixed.

chiisu81 wrote:Page 44, 62. Giant Fly Lair: remove extra space (...hallway west 20'...)

Fixed.

Thanks, Chi! It's looking much better. I'm going to do a flow check and post a new release right now.

How does this look for a 2E cover?

Amazing cover!

Dimirag wrote:Amazing cover!

Yes, very nice!