[AA3] A Temple of Slides and Stairs

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Re: [AA3] A Temple of Slides and Stairs

Post Mon Feb 03, 2020 9:57 pm

Thanks for the updates, and... sorry it's been the better part of a year since I said I'd work on this again. Whoops.
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Re: [AA3] A Temple of Slides and Stairs

Post Tue Feb 18, 2020 11:37 pm

Here is my list of corrections for A Temple of Slides and Stairs:

Page 4 – 1. Entryway – Paragraph 1 after boxed text.
Corrected spelling
Was:
abilty
Changed to:
ability

Page 4 – 1. Entryway – Paragraph 2 after boxed text.
Since the Magic Net is an item and not just a spell capitalized name per Style guide.
Was:
magic net
Changed to:
Magic Net

Page 4 – 1. Entryway – Paragraph 2 after boxed text.
Corrected spelling
Was:
entranceway
Changed to:
entrance way

Page 4 – 1. Entryway – Paragraph 3 after boxed text.
Since the Magic Net is an item and not just a spell capitalized name and bolded per Style guide.
Was:
magic net
Changed to:
Magic Net

Page 4 – 4 Giant Bees – Stat block
Change HD from ‘1’ to ‘1d4*’better match Core Rules changed ‘+ Poison’ from At to Dam field.
Was:
AC 13, HD 1, #At 1 Sting + Poison, Dam 1d4, Mv 10' Fly 50’, Sv F1, Ml 9, XP 13 ea.
Changed to:
AC 13, HD 1d4*, #At 1 Sting, Dam 1d4 + Poison, Mv 10' Fly 50’, Sv F1, Ml 9, XP 13 ea.

Page 4 – 2. South West – Room title.
Corrected spelling
Was:
South West
Changed to:
Southwest

Page 4 – 2. Southwest – Boxed text.
Corrected spelling
Was:
entranceway
Changed to:
entrance way

Page 5 – 2. Southwest – 2nd Boxed text.
Awkward language
Was
The slide itself is about 5' wide, very flat, and sheen with an oily hue.
Changed to:
The slide itself is about 5' wide, very flat, with an oily sheen.

Page 5 – 3. Central Room – Boxed text
Changed spelling
Was:
subfloor
Changed to
sub-floor

Page 5 – 3. Central Room – Boxed text, paragraph 1
Changed (‘) to (feet) per the Style Guide
Was:
50’ high
Changed to
50 feet high

Page 5 – 3. Central Room – Boxed text paragraph 2
Changed (‘) to (feet) per the Style Guide
Was:
3’ tall
Changed to
3 foot tall

Page 5 – 3. Central Room – Paragraph 1 after 2nd Boxed text
Removed bolding of potion since the spell associated with it isn’t listed.

Page 6 – 4. South East – Title
Correct spelling
Was:
South East
Changed to:
Southeast

Page 6 – 4. Southeast – Paragraph 1
Corrected wording
Was:
… if they head the player characters…
Changed to:
… if they heard the player characters…

Page 6 – 4. Southeast – Boxed text
Awkward language
Was:
This room appears to be exceptionally similar to the room you just previously saw. You see an additional source of light, though. A fire burns in a crude camp toward the center of the room and a group of orcs stands looking back at you!
Changed to:
This room appears to be very similar to the lower room with the bee hive. You see an additional source of light, though. A fire burns in a crude camp toward the center of the room and a group of orcs stand looking at you!

Page 6 – 4. Southeast – Paragraph 3 after boxed text
Changed wording to make better sense of situation.
Was:
covey
Changed to:
convey

Page 6 – 4. Southeast – Paragraph 3 after boxed text
Changed wording to make better sense of situation.
Was:
but the glimmer of gold tends to be a universally understood meaning.
Changed to:
but the glimmer of gold tends to be a universally understood language.

Page 6 – 4. Southeast – Paragraph 3 after boxed text
Changed wording to make better sense of situation. ‘Confrontations’ implies violence, while ‘meetings’ will imply negotiations and a more peaceful outcome. Also changed verb tense to a more current status ‘goes’ changed to ‘go’.
Was:
If confrontations with these Orcs goes well…
Changed to:
If meetings with these Orcs go well…

Page 6 – 3 Orcs – Treasure
Add punctuation
Was:
Treasure: 2 gp, 4 sp each
Changed to:
Treasure: 2 gp, 4 sp each.

Page 6 – 5. North East – Title
Correct spelling
Was:
North East
Changed to:
Northeast

Page 6 – 5. North East – Boxed text
Awkward language
Was
Inside of it is your guild leader, unconscious, clearly injured, but seemingly alive!
Changed to:
Inside is your guild leader, unconscious, clearly injured, but seemingly alive!

Page 7 – 6. North West – Title
Correct spelling
Was:
North West
Changed to:
Northwest

Page 7 – 6. North West – Boxed text
Awkward language
Was:
… moderately well lit from within by crystal statue.
Changed to:
… moderately well lit from within by a crystal statue.

Page 7 – 6. Northwest – Paragraph 1 after boxed text
Reducing number of pronouns
Was:
The frogmen are aware of the importance of the statue and will act so as to prevent player characters from approaching it. Their tactics will reflect this. A likely tactic is to wait close to the statue (delaying their action) until players approach.
Changed to:
The frogmen are aware of the importance of the statue and will act, so as to prevent player characters from approaching the statue. The frogmen tactics will reflect this, by waiting close to the statue and delaying action until the player characters approach.

Page 8 – Pregenerated Characters – Paragraph 2
Removed sentence about handouts since they are no longer in the PDF.

Page 8 – Fighter – PC One
Since weapon is given in equipment list added weapon name to #At field. Also removed ‘or by weapon’ from Dam field.
Was:
… #At 1, Dam 1d10 or by weapon, …
Changed to:
… #At 1 Great Axe, Dam 1d10, …

Page 8 – Fighter – PC Two
AC doesn’t add up equipment lists Chain Mail and a Shield which should give an AC of 16. Also changed style to match PC Three. Since weapon is given in equipment list added weapon name to #At field. Also removed ‘or by weapon’ from Dam field.
Was:
… AC 17, #At 1, Dam 1d8 or by weapon, …
Changed to:
… AC 15 (16 w/ Shield), #At 1 Long Sword, Dam 1d8, …

Page 8 – Fighter – PC Three
AC doesn’t add up equipment lists Chain Mail and a Shield which should give an AC of 16. Since weapon is given in equipment list added weapon name to #At field. Also removed ‘or by weapon’ from Dam field.
Was:
… AC 16 (17 w/ Shield), #At 1, Dam 1d6 or by weapon, …
Changed to:
… AC 15 (16 w/ Shield), #At 1 Spear, Dam 1d6 or 1d8 if used two-handed, …

Page 8 – Cleric – PC Four
AC doesn’t add up equipment lists Plate Mail and a Shield which should give an AC of 18. Also changed style to match PC Three. Since weapon is given in equipment list added weapon name to #At field. Also removed ‘or by weapon’ from Dam field.
Was:
… AC 17, #At 1, Dam 1d8 or by weapon, …
Changed to:
… AC 17 (18 w/ Shield), #At 1 Mace, Dam 1d8, …

Page 8 – Cleric – PC Five
AC doesn’t add up equipment lists Chain Mail and a Shield which should give an AC of 16. Also changed style to match PC Three. Since weapon is given in equipment list added weapon name to #At field. Also removed ‘or by weapon’ from Dam field.
Was:
… AC 15, #At 1, Dam 1d8 or by weapon, …
Changed to:
… AC 15 (16 w/ Shield), #At 1 Mace, Dam 1d8, …

Page 8 – Cleric – PC Six
Changed style to match PC Three. Since weapon is given in equipment list added weapon name to #At field. Also removed ‘or by weapon’ from Dam field.
Was:
… AC 16, #At 1, Dam 1d10 or by weapon, …
Changed to:
… AC 15 (16 w/ Shield), #At 1 Maul, Dam 1d10, …

Page 9 – Magic User – PC Seven
Since weapon is given in equipment list added weapon name to #At field. Also removed ‘or by weapon’ from Dam field.
… AC 13, #At 1, Dam 1d4 or by weapon, …
Changed to:
… AC 13, #At 1 Dagger, Dam 1d4, …

Page 9 – Magic User – PC Eight
Since weapon is given in equipment list added weapon name to #At field. Also removed ‘or by weapon’ from Dam field.
… AC 13, #At 1, Dam 1d6 or by weapon, …
Changed to:
… AC 13, #At 1 Quarterstaff, Dam 1d6, …

Page 9 – Thieves – PC Nine
Changed AC to match what is in equipment list. Remove shield note since a shield is not in the equipment list. Since shortbow and dagger are in the equipment list removed reference to shortsword in the #At field. Also removed ‘or by weapon’ from Dam field.
Was:
… AC 14 (15 w/ Shield), #At 1 Shortbow or 1 Shortsword, Dam 1d6 or by weapon, …
Changed to:
… AC 13, #At 1 Shortbow, Dam 1d6, …

Page 9 – Thieves – PC Ten
Changed AC to match what is in equipment list. Remove shield note since a thief usually doesn’t use a shield. Since shortbow and dagger are in the equipment list removed reference to shortsword in the #At field. Also removed ‘or by weapon’ from Dam field.
Was:
… AC 15, #At 1, Dam 1d8 or by weapon, …
Changed to:
… AC 13, #At 1 Long Sword, Dam 1d8, …

Page 10 – Random Encounter Monsters – Paragraph after Monster table
Removed bold from ‘treasure types’.

Page 10 – 1d2 Frogmen – Stat block
Was
… #At 1/2 …
Changed to:
… #At 1 or 2 weapons …

Page 10 – 1d2 Frogmen – HP blocks
Didn’t have enough blocks.
Was
17 ☐☐☐☐☐ ☐☐☐☐☐ ☐☐
12 ☐☐☐☐☐ ☐☐☐☐☐ ☐
Changed to:
17 ☐☐☐☐☐ ☐☐☐☐☐ ☐☐☐☐☐ ☐☐
12 ☐☐☐☐☐ ☐☐☐☐☐ ☐☐

Page 10 – 1d6 Orcs – Stat block
Was
… #At 1 …
Changed to:
… #At 1 weapon …

Page 10 – 2d4 Goblins – Stat block
Was
… #At 1 …
Changed to:
… #At 1 weapon…

Page 10 – 2d4 Centipedes – Stat block
Was
… #At 1…
Changed to:
… #At 1 bite…

Page 10 – 1d6 Giant Bees – Stat block
Changed to better match the Core Rules
Was
… AC 14, HD 1d4 HP #At 1, …
Changed to:
… AC 13, HD 1d4 HP* #At 1 sting, …

Page 10 – 1d3 Tentacle Worms – Stat block
Changed to better match the Core Rules
Was
… AC 14, HD 3*, #At 6, …
Changed to:
… AC 13, HD 3*, #At 6 tentacles, …

Added myself to the list of proof readers.

I'll put the ODT and PDF files for R9 in the first post.
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Re: [AA3] A Temple of Slides and Stairs

Post Tue Feb 18, 2020 11:42 pm

Here are some things I had questions about for orobourus, Chii or Solo:

Should the Random Monsters detailed on pages 10 and 11 be brought up to be after the table of Wandering Monsters on page 3.

Page 9 – Magic Users – PC Seven and PC Eight
The equipment lists for both Magic Users have Leather Armor. The Core Rules state that due to constraints in movement a Magic User can’t use armor. See page 8 “Magic-Users may not wear armor of any sort nor use a shield as such things interfere with spellcasting.” Also page 151 “A Magic-User in armor can’t cast spells at all; any such attempt fails, and the spell is lost.”

Page 9 – Thieves – PC Ten
The equipment list for PC Ten has a Shield. The Core Rules state that thieves don’t use shields which would interfere with the Thief Abilities. See page 8 “They may use any weapon, but may not wear metal armor as it interferes with stealthy activities, nor may they use shields of any sort.”

Page 12 and Page 14 – Map of top floor
Should there just be two squares one for the stair and one for the slide? Since that is how the description would work.
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Re: [AA3] A Temple of Slides and Stairs

Post Tue Feb 18, 2020 11:49 pm

Feel free to fix (remove) the armor for the magic-users, and the shield for the thief. If you feel like the arrangement of the random monsters is inefficient, you may change that as well.

As for the map issue... I'll have to look at it.
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Re: [AA3] A Temple of Slides and Stairs

Post Wed Feb 19, 2020 1:28 am

Page 4 and Page 10 – Random Monsters
Moved from page 10 to page 4 after the table.

Page 10 – Magic Users – PC Seven and PC Eight
Per Solo’s suggestion removed the Leather Armor from the equipment list and set the AC to 11.

Page 10 – Thieves – PC Ten
Per Solo’s suggestion removed the Shield from the equipment list.

R10 will be put into the first post.
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Re: [AA3] A Temple of Slides and Stairs

Post Wed Feb 19, 2020 2:38 pm

I've added r10 to the Projects folder as well. Thank you Al for helping check all of these. 8-)
I haven't checked if the map file is accessible by us in MapMatic, or if orobouros will need to update it.
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Re: [AA3] A Temple of Slides and Stairs

Post Wed Feb 19, 2020 5:56 pm

Those maps were not done in MapMatic.

I'll read through the adventure tonight and figure out if it needs fixing, and if so, how.
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Re: [AA3] A Temple of Slides and Stairs

Post Wed Feb 26, 2020 11:18 am

r11 uploaded to first post. Lots of little corrections, and cleaned up the map backgrounds a little. I think the map depiction is fine as-is.
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Re: [AA3] A Temple of Slides and Stairs

Post Tue Mar 03, 2020 10:03 am

Gonna go ahead and lock this thread, as I'm starting to put AA3 together, starting with this adventure. The AA3 thread will be updated and unlocked once I've finished the initial work.
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