CS2 The Pit

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Re: CS2 The Pit

Post Fri Jun 16, 2017 4:55 pm

My R3 sent to Solo.
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Re: CS2 The Pit

Post Mon Jun 19, 2017 5:36 pm

Just upload revised versions here. I don't think CS2 is ready for the Downloads page yet.
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Post Mon Jun 19, 2017 6:48 pm

I didn't know how far you had gotten into your R3; I can upload mine to the first post if that's OK.
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Post Mon Jun 19, 2017 7:33 pm

Yes, do that. I'll compare them later if I have a chance.
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Re: CS2 The Pit

Post Tue Jun 20, 2017 7:02 am

Ok, I have uploaded R3 to the first post. This has all the changes I made from R2. Solo, the ODT in the projects folder is the one with track changes still turned on, so you can see what all I did.
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Post Tue Jun 20, 2017 8:33 am

I'm working on R4 right now, merging your version of R3 with mine.
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Re: CS2 The Pit

Post Tue Jun 20, 2017 8:40 am

One note:

Nazgor is a place. Thus, Nazgorean is always capitalized properly.
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Re: CS2 The Pit

Post Tue Jun 20, 2017 8:49 am

The traps in Dread Warrens need to be detailed. If they are just the traps from the Core Rules, we should say so, and give a page reference.

Probably need to detail the wandering monsters. (For that matter, CS1 probably needs that in places.)
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Re: CS2 The Pit

Post Thu Jun 22, 2017 5:23 pm

Ok, I finished an editing pass, mainly looking for things like excessive use of the passive voice, subject confusion, etc. I tried to preserve editorial content wherever possible. Let me know if my edits went too far, not far enough, etc., or even if this sort of review is useful.
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Re: CS2 The Pit

Post Fri Jun 23, 2017 7:07 am

Re-uploaded your attachment with track changes showing, along with adding both of us for editing credits. If you want your real name used, PM Solo.

Wow I missed a lot. :shock: Most if not all of your changes look good! Since Solo is already working on R4, I'm gonna let him go over your edits and incorporate what he wants into R4. Solo, I've copied this file to the Projects folder.
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