The Mystery of Drakestein Island

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John Dutton
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The Mystery of Drakestein Island

Post Thu Aug 20, 2015 7:27 pm

Hi, I don't know whether its the done thing to submit an adventure when there's already one in the workshop. However, I have a few saved on my computer that I ran with my group earlier this year. I've spent the last week tidying a couple of them up (Wulfric's Tomb and The Mystery of Drakestein Island) and wanted to see what people thought. I've tried to make them more in line with BF's standard format.

Anyway, this is Drakestein. I hope it passes muster and of course, it goes without saying that all comments are most welcome.

By the way, the reason Drakeshaven features again, is because the school in which I teach is in a harbour town called Newhaven and I thought the kids would like a setting with a similar name.
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Re: Drakestein Island

Post Thu Aug 20, 2015 7:49 pm

Just read the adventure. Looks pretty good, just a few typos here and there and a good play on the ring!
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Re: Drakestein Island

Post Fri Aug 21, 2015 12:14 am

John,
I look forward to reading more of your work.
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Re: Drakestein Island

Post Sat Aug 22, 2015 2:59 pm

Working on getting this converted to BFRPG format.
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Re: Drakestein Island

Post Sat Aug 22, 2015 5:02 pm

Text formatted and placed in first post as PDF. Once I get all the maps integrated I'll post ODT as well.
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Post Sat Aug 22, 2015 9:01 pm

Images added; PDF updated and ODT added to first post.
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Re: Drakestein Island

Post Mon Aug 24, 2015 10:46 am

Re-uploaded r1 with spelling corrections; also re-named all references to the DM as GM, as BFRPG uses that term.
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Re: Drakestein Island

Post Tue Feb 02, 2016 11:05 am

I know this isn't on the priority list, but, I just got a chance to finish my first go over.

Drakestein Island Corrections

Page 3
200'
"drop and item" should be "drop an item"
300'
"but up further progress" should be "but, further progress"
"gate of the old watchtower" should be "gate of an old watchtower"

Page 4
Move description of NPC locations to the individual rooms with the stipulation that these NPCs can move from their original locations.

Page 5
Text box for Ida's Tomb
"Is the actually highest" should be "is actually the highest"

Page 6
Second text box about corridor
"edge of raging sea" should be "edge of a raging sea"

Paragraph after second text box
"smashed open and is lying is pieces" should be "smashed open laying in pieces"

14 Ruined Tower
First text box
"imposing structure. 50' tall" should be "imposing structure at 50',"

Paragraph after first text box
"is locked and there are" should be "is locked, there are"

"Windows on first floor" should be "Windows on the first floor"

Description of Fishmen Guards
First guard says 14 hit points shows 15 boxes

Magic Circle
"has been painted golden" should be "has been painted gold"

Table
"Lying" should be "laying"

Page 7
16. Crastar's Private Chamber
"not meet the Crastar until" should be "not meet Crastar until"
"in his the secret chamber" should be "in his secret chamber"

Casket
"each and velvet lined" should be "each and a velvet lined"
Curtain text box
"be in meditating, but" should be, "be meditating, but"
"and a looks astonished" should be "and looks astonished"

Crastar description
"Level -6 Magic User" should be, "Level 6 Magic User"

Page 8
19 Sea Unicorn's Horn
"reveal and ornately" should be "reveal an ornately"

Page 9
Young Man third paragraph
"He is knows that" should be "He also knows that"

Page 11
28 Secret Chamber should be bolded

"not meet the Crastar until" should be "not meet Crastar until"

If Crastar is here text box
"be in meditating, but" should be, "be meditating, but"
"and a looks astonished" should be "and looks astonished"

Crastar description
"Level -6 Magic User" should be, "Level 6 Magic User"

29 Guard Post should be bolded and on a line by itself.

Page 12
Text box for The Deck
"there is cabin" should be, "there are cabins"

Page 15
"1. Cove" should be "1-4. Cove"
"5. Old Watch Tower" should be "5-9. Old Watch Tower"
"14. Ruined Tower" should be "14-19. Ruined Tower"
Just above the line for the Fishman Caves have an entry for "30. Beach"

Page 18
Have a 13 on the map for Ida's Tomb
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Re: Drakestein Island

Post Tue Feb 02, 2016 3:40 pm

Thanks for the edits! I've uploaded R2 to the first post.
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Re: Drakestein Island

Post Tue Mar 28, 2017 2:39 pm

R3 uploaded to first post. Going through this to get ready to put into AA2 before too long. After that may work on John's other 2 to put in as well.
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