Reclamation of Castle Devyn

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AlMan
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Re: Reclamation of Castle Devyn

Post Sun Mar 12, 2017 9:49 pm

I know this is a blast from the past, but with a couple corrections it would fit right into AA2. Here are the corrections and I think it will be ready to include in the anthology.

Page 2 – If the temple has not already… - paragraph 1
Currently:
Cyril's face is friendly but troubled as he looks out to at the party, and says
Suggest:
Cyril's face is friendly but troubled as he looks at the party, and says,

Page 2 – If the temple has already… - paragraph 1
Currently:
...threat): his face is friendly but troubled as he looks out to at the party, and says “Are you prepared to explore further?”
Suggest:
threat): his face is friendly but troubled as he looks at the party, and says “Are you prepared to explore further?”

Page 2 – If the temple has already… - paragraph 2
Would Cyril mention this to the party if he knew the party was the group that cleared the temple?
Suggest:
If the party finished Hillman Point, Cyril will say, “Ever since you cleared the trouble at the temple there are still problems on the island and the people are stilled worried.”

Page 5 – Bear
There are 25 blocks the HP say 27, the first set of blocks only has three boxes.

Page 5 – Boar
The top 15 blocks of HP are separated further than the other monster blocks.

Page 8 – 11. Great Hall
Currently:
There are long tables running parallel to the large double doors, each as long enough to reach the pillars on either side.
Suggest:
There are long tables running parallel to the large double doors, each long enough to reach the pillars on either side.
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Re: Reclamation of Castle Devyn

Post Mon Mar 13, 2017 10:09 am

Thank you Al :) I'll work on these and get a new version posted.

I'm not sure if this would make its way into AA2. It has a lot of repeated text as the other 2 Gulshan adventures of mine, and I'm not sure I'd want the first 2 but not the 3rd in AA2; and having all 3 in there may be a bit too much. I've already got 2 entries in AA2, and I'm intending to finish up Halls of Finley Manor for it as well.
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Re: Reclamation of Castle Devyn

Post Mon Mar 13, 2017 1:57 pm

R13 posted.
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Re: Reclamation of Castle Devyn

Post Tue Mar 14, 2017 9:29 am

No such thing as too much adventuring goodness in AA2.

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Re: Reclamation of Castle Devyn

Post Tue Mar 14, 2017 10:07 am

I don't think my 3 would be long enough to be printed on their own, especially with the repeated text cut out, so it's conceivable to have them in AA2. I'd have to see how to have it all formatted and layed out, as each adventure has its own level range and their own dungeon maps, while sharing the island map.

I may also consider the same for John Dutton, to have all 3 of his put into AA2, unless his page-count is way higher.
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Re: Reclamation of Castle Devyn

Post Mon Apr 17, 2017 1:30 pm

R14 uploaded. Worked on having more boxed text.
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