[AA3] Fire Mountain
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Re: Fire Mountain
Gedit?
Bah.
If I'm editing a text file, I'm using VIM.
(actually, seriously, vim is my preference for all things textual...)
Bah.
If I'm editing a text file, I'm using VIM.
(actually, seriously, vim is my preference for all things textual...)
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Re: Fire Mountain
Chi, I can probably do the editing in the next days if you prefer to work on your next adventure
Just let me know !
Just let me know !
Re: Fire Mountain
I've already converted it and given it a quick look-over. Didn't interfere with my other 2 I'm working on.
Re: Fire Mountain
You're too fast, Chi !
Re: Fire Mountain
I'm a ninja with cat-like reflexes, rawr!
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Re: Fire Mountain
On page 2, column 1 in the second boxed text about half-way is:
A stream flows from the northern side of the mountain into a lake shallow lake.
A stream flows from the northern side of the mountain into a lake shallow lake.
Re: Fire Mountain
Sorry, caught a few more. I'm reading it slowly as time permits.
Page 3, second column. The entry for room 9 reads:
9. Magma Chamber: The passage opens 20ft up the side of large cavern the floor of which is filled with magma.
Its been a while since I did any technical editing but I think it would read easier as:
9. Magma Chamber: The passage opens 20ft up the side of a large cavern, the floor of which is filled with magma.
Page 5, first column, end of first paragraph:
Remove that the prior to Oswy as Oswy is a proper name. Then it will read:
furthermore, there is a chance (GM's discretion) Oswy will cry at an inopportune moment.
Page 5, second column, box text for room 14:
He close to you and eying you suspiciously snarls,
He (moves, flies, etc.) close to you and eyeing you suspiciously snarls,
Page 3, second column. The entry for room 9 reads:
9. Magma Chamber: The passage opens 20ft up the side of large cavern the floor of which is filled with magma.
Its been a while since I did any technical editing but I think it would read easier as:
9. Magma Chamber: The passage opens 20ft up the side of a large cavern, the floor of which is filled with magma.
Page 5, first column, end of first paragraph:
Remove that the prior to Oswy as Oswy is a proper name. Then it will read:
furthermore, there is a chance (GM's discretion) Oswy will cry at an inopportune moment.
Page 5, second column, box text for room 14:
He close to you and eying you suspiciously snarls,
He (moves, flies, etc.) close to you and eyeing you suspiciously snarls,
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