[AA2] The Temple at Hillman Point

[chiisu81]

Absolutely

[k_ba]

Moot. Looks like you already moved the language in the description.

Let me know if you want me to take a last pass through to unify any of the language.

[chiisu81]

Hi Keith, yes please feel free! I can always use another set of eyes to make sure I'm missing something obvious. If you find anything, and not much, feel free to post it here; if it's more, you can email to me as before.

After Dimirag submits his artwork this will likely be ready for final polish so I can send off for AA2. The next adventure is slowly coming along!

[Solomoriah]

There's time, Dimi. This is destined for AA2, and that's a long way from done.

[Dimirag]

Thanks Chii and Solo

[k_ba]

Chi -
The stashes of treasure should probably be toned down a bit in my opinion. The flow is good, and I dig it. A good collaborative adventure.

You might change the "daily" visits by Fr Jacob to weekly visits. I was clearly smoking the crack rock when I wrote that.

The sceptre should be clearly stated to be a silver mace, also.

K

[mTeasdale]

Chi -
The stashes of treasure should probably be toned down a bit in my opinion. The flow is good, and I dig it. A good collaborative adventure.

You might change the "daily" visits by Fr Jacob to weekly visits. I was clearly smoking the crack rock when I wrote that.

The sceptre should be clearly stated to be a silver mace, also.

K

Silver club would probably fit more in my opinion. A scepter should be lighter/smaller than a mace.

[k_ba]

Yep, that is better.

[chiisu81]

R10 uploaded!

[ybn1197]

I was reading through R10 and I noticed a slight editing issue. On page 2, second column, under Accessing the Temple "Since the temple is at Hillman Point, there is only way to get there from Locran".