[AA2] The Temple at Hillman Point

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Re: The Temple at Hillman Point

Post Mon Jul 27, 2015 11:35 am

Absolutely :)
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Re: The Temple at Hillman Point

Post Mon Jul 27, 2015 11:43 am

Moot. Looks like you already moved the language in the description. :)

Let me know if you want me to take a last pass through to unify any of the language.
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Re: The Temple at Hillman Point

Post Mon Jul 27, 2015 1:39 pm

Hi Keith, yes please feel free! I can always use another set of eyes to make sure I'm missing something obvious. If you find anything, and not much, feel free to post it here; if it's more, you can email to me as before.

After Dimirag submits his artwork this will likely be ready for final polish so I can send off for AA2. The next adventure is slowly coming along!
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Re: The Temple at Hillman Point

Post Mon Jul 27, 2015 1:45 pm

There's time, Dimi. This is destined for AA2, and that's a long way from done.
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Re: The Temple at Hillman Point

Post Mon Jul 27, 2015 2:20 pm

Thanks Chii and Solo
Sorry for any misspelling or writing error, I am not a native English speaker
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Re: The Temple at Hillman Point

Post Mon Jul 27, 2015 10:49 pm

Chi -
The stashes of treasure should probably be toned down a bit in my opinion. The flow is good, and I dig it. A good collaborative adventure.

You might change the "daily" visits by Fr Jacob to weekly visits. I was clearly smoking the crack rock when I wrote that. :)

The sceptre should be clearly stated to be a silver mace, also.

K
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Re: The Temple at Hillman Point

Post Mon Jul 27, 2015 11:31 pm

k_ba wrote:Chi -
The stashes of treasure should probably be toned down a bit in my opinion. The flow is good, and I dig it. A good collaborative adventure.

You might change the "daily" visits by Fr Jacob to weekly visits. I was clearly smoking the crack rock when I wrote that. :)

The sceptre should be clearly stated to be a silver mace, also.

K
Silver club would probably fit more in my opinion. A scepter should be lighter/smaller than a mace.
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Re: The Temple at Hillman Point

Post Mon Jul 27, 2015 11:38 pm

Yep, that is better.
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Re: The Temple at Hillman Point

Post Tue Jul 28, 2015 8:48 am

R10 uploaded!
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Re: The Temple at Hillman Point

Post Wed Jul 29, 2015 2:07 pm

I was reading through R10 and I noticed a slight editing issue. On page 2, second column, under Accessing the Temple "Since the temple is at Hillman Point, there is only way to get there from Locran".
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