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Downloaded latest PDF to check.
Page 7: the squares at the top right are definitely not the normal style/look
Page 8: HP 22 only has 20 squares
Page 10: the squares on the left are definitely not the normal style/look
Page 14: 2nd HP 22 has 23 squares
Page 20: HP 11 has 13 squares
Page 22: is there a public link for this map; it needs some shading/filling in
Page 29: same for this; those 2 white squares on the left are killing me
Page 41: HP 47 squares are out of whack

chiisu81 wrote:Downloaded latest PDF to check.
Page 7: the squares at the top right are definitely not the normal style/look

No, they aren't. Good catch. Fixed.

chiisu81 wrote:Page 8: HP 22 only has 20 squares

Fixed.

chiisu81 wrote:Page 10: the squares on the left are definitely not the normal style/look

Fixed.

chiisu81 wrote:Page 14: 2nd HP 22 has 23 squares

Fixed.

chiisu81 wrote:Page 20: HP 11 has 13 squares

Fixed.

chiisu81 wrote:Page 22: is there a public link for this map; it needs some shading/filling in

I just redrew it. Pretty simple map, not an issue.

chiisu81 wrote:Page 29: same for this; those 2 white squares on the left are killing me

Fixed this also.

chiisu81 wrote:Page 41: HP 47 squares are out of whack

Fixed.

I'm going to push R8 to the server now...

Thanks! Will re-read it over the weekend; I've been (extremely slowly) working on my short adventure; I may seem nit-picky at times with my editing, but I will never under-estimate the amount of effort, blood, and tears it takes to create original content.

Page 4: in the ODT file I see different-sized boxes on the right side (as well as grey bars in the spaces), but in the PDF it's fine
Page 4, last boxed text: extra space (room is covered)
Page 12, 3rd paragraph: 2 sentences with extra spaces (made his first, them to an)
Page 14-16: room headers need colon
Page 15, Alchemist Fire: 3 sentences with extra spaces (no fuse., 2d8 hit points, damage from)
Page 16, first boxed text: extra space (10 cots)
Page 16, Outcomes: extra space (to convince)
Page 20-21: room headers need colon
Page 23, What's Really Going On: extra space after opening parenthesis
Page 23, Ground Level Key: extra space (a verdigris)
Page 24: extra space before Spells and : (2x)
Page 24, 3. Dining Hall: extra space (scrolls : )
Page 24: need comma for "6a, 6b 6c"
Page 26, first boxed text: extra space (two big)
Page 26, 16. Ghoul's Cave: extra space (party : )
Page 27: extra spaces (Spells :, Resistances : )
Page 27: shorten to Basic Fantasy Field Guide
Page 33: room header needs colon
Page 39, 1. Prison: correct to "Alternatively, the GM may want to place an NPC if there's less than four PCs."
Page 39, 1. Prison: extra space (so : )
Page 40, 3rd boxed text: correct to "...an old..."

chiisu81 wrote:Page 4: in the ODT file I see different-sized boxes on the right side (as well as grey bars in the spaces), but in the PDF it's fine

The bigger ones were errors, and there were 332 of them in the document. The checkbox should always be the one the checkboxer web page uses. Of course, this was my error, somehow.

chiisu81 wrote:Page 4, last boxed text: extra space (room is covered)

How DO you do that?

chiisu81 wrote:Page 12, 3rd paragraph: 2 sentences with extra spaces (made his first, them to an)

Fixed.

chiisu81 wrote:Page 14-16: room headers need colon

Fixed.

chiisu81 wrote:Page 15, Alchemist Fire: 3 sentences with extra spaces (no fuse., 2d8 hit points, damage from)

Fixed.

As a general principle, I prefer to say "1d8 points of damage" rather than "1d8 damage" or alternately "1d8 hit points of damage." Consistency here isn't a rule but just a guideline... "1d8 damage" is awkwardly incomplete, "hit points of damage" just sounds wrong.

chiisu81 wrote:Page 16, first boxed text: extra space (10 cots)

Fixed.

chiisu81 wrote:Page 16, Outcomes: extra space (to convince)

Fixed.

chiisu81 wrote:Page 20-21: room headers need colon

Fixed. Also made them uppercase, for consistency.

chiisu81 wrote:Page 23, What's Really Going On: extra space after opening parenthesis

Fixed. Also changed "that" to "which."

chiisu81 wrote:Page 23, Ground Level Key: extra space (a verdigris)

Fixed. Also changed to past tense "verdigrised."

chiisu81 wrote:Page 24: extra space before Spells and : (2x)

Fixed. There were several of those, actually.

chiisu81 wrote:Page 24, 3. Dining Hall: extra space (scrolls : )

Fixed.

chiisu81 wrote:Page 24: need comma for "6a, 6b 6c"

Fixed.

chiisu81 wrote:Page 26, first boxed text: extra space (two big)

Fixed. Changed big to large, also.

chiisu81 wrote:Page 26, 16. Ghoul's Cave: extra space (party : )

Fixed.

chiisu81 wrote:Page 27: extra spaces (Spells :, Resistances : )

Fixed. Got these with a global replace.

chiisu81 wrote:Page 27: shorten to Basic Fantasy Field Guide

Agreed. Fixed.

chiisu81 wrote:Page 33: room header needs colon

Fixed.

chiisu81 wrote:Page 39, 1. Prison: correct to "Alternatively, the GM may want to place an NPC if there's less than four PCs."

Mm. Original was awkward, but I like this version better: "Alternately, the GM may wants to place an NPC there who might be willing to join the party, if there are fewer than four player characters."

I REALLY don't like "alternatively," and "fewer than" sounds better to me than "less than" when talking about discrete numbers of things, people, etc.

chiisu81 wrote:Page 39, 1. Prison: extra space (so : )

Fixed, as above.

chiisu81 wrote:Page 40, 3rd boxed text: correct to "...an old..."

Needed a bit more than that; some tense issues.

I think I need to review this book a bit more. The material is good but the writing is a bit uneven.

Now uploading R9 to the first post in this thread.

For the doble spaces use the search function and put two spaces, or simply replace two spaces with a single one

I know how to globally fix them... what amazes me is how easily he SEES them.

I though he uses the search function on the .odt file

Nope simply by eye; I will say I usually have it on one-page view and zoomed in quite a bit as I can't stand to read it any other way on a screen.