[AA3] Fire Mountain

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Re: Fire Mountain

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Gedit?

Bah.

If I'm editing a text file, I'm using VIM.

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(actually, seriously, vim is my preference for all things textual...)
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Chi, I can probably do the editing in the next days if you prefer to work on your next adventure 8-)

Just let me know !
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I've already converted it and given it a quick look-over. Didn't interfere with my other 2 I'm working on. ;)
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Re: Fire Mountain

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You're too fast, Chi !
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I'm a ninja with cat-like reflexes, rawr!
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Re: Fire Mountain

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r2 uploaded; fixed boxed text formatting
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Re: Fire Mountain

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On page 2, column 1 in the second boxed text about half-way is:
A stream flows from the northern side of the mountain into a lake shallow lake.
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Re: Fire Mountain

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Good eye; fixed!
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Re: Fire Mountain

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Sorry, caught a few more. I'm reading it slowly as time permits.

Page 3, second column. The entry for room 9 reads:

9. Magma Chamber: The passage opens 20ft up the side of large cavern the floor of which is filled with magma.

Its been a while since I did any technical editing but I think it would read easier as:

9. Magma Chamber: The passage opens 20ft up the side of a large cavern, the floor of which is filled with magma.

Page 5, first column, end of first paragraph:

Remove that the prior to Oswy as Oswy is a proper name. Then it will read:

furthermore, there is a chance (GM's discretion) Oswy will cry at an inopportune moment.

Page 5, second column, box text for room 14:

He close to you and eying you suspiciously snarls,

He (moves, flies, etc.) close to you and eyeing you suspiciously snarls,
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Re: Fire Mountain

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More good catches! R4 uploaded.
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